wawwwwwww noooo its all sad!

ok pull urself together andy, just do the commenting: the layout is reallycool, with the whole 'you were', 'and then', 'so now' thing kinda overviewing the period of the thingness

bah, unfortunately i know what that kinda thing feels like and it sucks but i can really connect to this tis very awesomeful

(minor thing: 'borken' in stanza before 'so now' )

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really like this one,the vulnerabilty really shines through,as well as pain-well done

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is this how love curtails around? Shining bright but dying out like the stars above? Your presence of time really puts the this poem into perspective and lets the reader linger on to the end. And the ending was just outstanding. Smashing! You're on your A game.

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This is beautiful Sarah, i hope i know what it's about. You made me cry, yes dear you made me... cry But i love it, a gift of silence for someone who you want to scream at to notice who you are. I think the subject should see it, It maybe to much for them to understand, but i think by doing so they might realise their little girl in your full spot light; a beautiful poet young woman , whos all growed up, ready to take fight... Argh tears again I wish i could hug you Saz, and take your pain away, but i can't. also i can't see the scream properlt its a bit blurred, by my emotion, brought on by yours. I loev you Sarah, im sorry i can't say any more

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Lol! Thanks!! It does suck...but hey if we don't get through the bad things we can never make the most of the good things

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Thank you

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Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it ! I was hoping the use of time frame would add to it a little!

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You made me cry just by reading your comment I love you too

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yup, amen sister

ah well, at least we get plenty of goodtimes to enjoy

...please tell me you get good times if not i'l send you a currant cake

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Its just a three letter word
I have only two emotions: Happy and dancing!

Lol, I do get good times, I just tend to be more inspired to write poetry about the bad things, it comes more easily I suppose... currant cakes are fun!

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