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Malicious forms of demonic entities
Slither over this dark, barren land.
Fed by the tarnished, black shades of the night,
Mingling mercilessly with the remnants
Of stale life.
And consuming its dying flames...

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Creeping vegetation slowly covers the facades,
To mask the decaying memories of the past,
Inscribed on the lichen covered stone:

'In hatred and disgust,
We leave you here to rot,
You'll slowly turn to dust,
What you deserved, you got.'


Fresh bodies swing alongside earlier victims,
With their drained, purple tinted complexions
And their whitened staring eyes.

The stench of rotting flesh
An undesired stimulus,
An all consuming, gagging odour
Inflicted on more than senses...

Decaying clumps of black skin fall in heaps,
Lifeless cells of rotting neglect
Rife with maggot infestation and the scent of death.

Stiff joints beneath limp lifelessness,
A mortal contradiction beneath the
Sallow shrunken skin of
Death's consumption.

Young and newly wasted,
Crimson drops slowly alight
From the corner of indigo lips,
As parchment skin slowly bruises,
Leaving speckled lilac impressions,
While a once perfect nose, lies a crooked, bloody mess.

A sprawling stain
Permeates the white cotton,
Spreading outwards from an open wound,
A bore hole to the heart,
Exposing a pumping wave of blood.
The remnants of cold-blooded murder.

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Burial, execution, homicide,
A trail of malignant carnage.
They feed on the scattered souls
Of each one,
Asphyxiating freedom,
Annihilating free-will with control...

Congregated, they traverse the departing landscape,
And cruising across abandoned battlefields
They smell the scent of massacre on the air,
And breezing by on cold winds
The poppy petals rustle at their haunting presence...
©2005-2009 ~petit-chou-fleur
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:

Author's Comments

Well this is the first poem worth posting that I've written recently, wrote it last night and finished it off today. I wrote it for a contest about Darkness at ~PoeticPath which I'm a member of. So basically to fit with the darkness theme this is about death! :evillaugh:

Please let me know what you think!

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:iconlucky-tweak:
yay very dark very expressive very good
if you put this much effort into something lighter itd be even better

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Neutral nothings notice nonchalance, nodding nominally.
Or others opting out of opinionated oracles orchestrating our opus.
:iconcecilblueberry:
Bloody Hell (literally!) I don't know what to say, honestly. You say I'm good at poetry. Whatever! That poem, no not poem, work of perfect art was absolutely brilliant. It left a shiver up my spine. I especially love the rhyming stanza:

'In hatred and disgust,
We leave you here to rot,
You'll slowly turn to dust,
What you deserved, you got.'

As written in my English Literature exam, that rhyme scheme truly stays with the reader. Wow! I'm so jealous, yet mystfied at the same time. You have a real talent here. I can see myself one day sitting in a coffee shop (with a tostato!) drinking a cappucino, reading a book of poems by Sarah Wilson.

And as I can't think of anything else to say, I'll leave you with my undiyng love of you and your work.

Oliver xxx

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Why are my heart and head at war?
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Thanks you so so so much, you have no idea how much it means to me that you like this! :glomp: :hug: The fun of tostatos and costa coffee lol!

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
Check out my stuff~~> [link]
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Yeah, I don't usually write about stuff this dark and it doesn't come naturally to write about stuff like this so that why I had to put so much effort into it! When I get some inspiration I'll definitely make sure I perfect it, alot of my poetry recently has been a bit rough around the edges. Glad you like it :)

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
Check out my stuff~~> [link]
:iconcecilblueberry:
It's ok, it was so good! Never actually been to costa coffee. We should go after exams are over. Just go into Leeds to visit Costa Coffee, then go home again! :hug:

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Why are my heart and head at war?
:iconbrokenboulevard:
:O Wooooooooh. Dude. :faint: I knew you'd come up with something good because of your writer's block... and wooooooow. :clap: Awesomeness!!!!!!! :+fav:

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[O.o] o rly?
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-"--"- STAND BACK! I'M GOING TO TRY SCIENCE.
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Thank you so much! :hug:

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
Check out my stuff~~> [link]
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Thank you so much :D I'm glad you like it :hug:

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
Check out my stuff~~> [link]
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Lol, we have to buy frescatos they are such nice milkshake type things, however starbucks frappaccinos are better so we could go to starbucks as well, just for a coffee shop tour!

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
Check out my stuff~~> [link]
:iconbarishiman:
absolutely amazing! I can tell you really put a lot of work in this piece. Your vocab blew the roof of this house! I need to find where you are getting your words because they make this poem feel alive among the dead. Imagery is outstanding!

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