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In black and green
Lie minds unseen
While vacant wanderers wander

An empty sheen
Of eyes so keen
Remain the stilled beating hearts

In new things brought
You can't help routine
It beckons to dull new impressions

In this time me live
Things lay named, boxed and caged
And all wonders lie defeated with stickers N-O-R-M-A-L

As heads bash on walls
Senses close and implode
And the room closes in all around

Fallen and risen
You search in the crowd
For the person whose heart seems most open
©2005-2009 ~petit-chou-fleur
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:

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When gems lose their shine...

A spur of the moment thing, very very very minimal editing, mainly just straight form my head, for some reason I really liek this, even though there is not a thing technically good about it really, so please don't tell me that it doesn't always make sense or seem poetically right because its jst the meain ideas I wanted to get over...

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:iconmolofishy:
Oh, you write wonderfully. I love this piece!

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Come away O human child.
To the waters and the wild.
With a faery hand in hand.
For the world's more full of weeping.
Than you can understand.
:iconsjraine:
Its raw. I'm going to be predictable and yet again give you a fave. lol. It's an issue I have. ;) Seriously, I think its good. Open, honest emotion, not stilted by...consideration. Hmmm. somehow that sounded better in my head. I'll shoosh now.

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- All I Need Now Is Some Intellectual Intercourse - :sarcasticclap: ... :pride:
:iconjustpolly:
wow,this is impressive, you've got an awesome flow from beginning to end and i love the last line of every verse,really breaks away for impact,the last verse is my favourite,really well done sweety :hug:

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-polly:you say i'm weird as if it's a bad thing...
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Lol, thanks a lot :) I know what you mean, it's like it should be raw somehow...

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
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:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Thank you so much :D

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
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:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
Thanks a lot hunni, I'm so glad you liked this, especially as it was such raw feelings! :cuddle:

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Tranquility interrupted by a jealous mind, life overcome by the grief of the ending, celebratory drinks for a lost occasion, a mind full of black, the tainted, dirty white.
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:iconcecilblueberry:
Wonderful! :hug:

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Why are my heart and head at war?
:iconduveau23:
wow nice flow and metre........... wicked awesome!

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"Lovers and madmen have such seething brains"
- A Midsummer Night's Dream, Act V, Scene I.
:iconpetit-chou-fleur:
:D Fankooo

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